Wednesday 2 November 2011

The Day of Halloween

I went trick-or-treating with my best friends Lina, Mary, and Lita. Our pillowcases were full of candy, and it was getting late, so my friends wanted to go home.

I wanted more candy so I turned to my friends and said, “Let’s knock on a few more doors and then head for home.”

They were worried because they thought it was already too late. “Let’s go home now,” they said to me. I told them not to worry because we could take a shortcut through the old forest.

So after a few more houses, I took my friends to the path that went through the forest. We walked for about 30 minutes and then, suddenly, I felt very strange. I couldn’t remember the way! It was dark and foggy. We were lost. And to make matters worse, it started to rain. And then, it started to pour. Lightning lit up the sky and some thunder. We wandered around in the rain for over two hours. We were very cold. And then, at about midnight, I saw an old abandoned house on a hill.

“I think we’ll have to spend the night in that old house and wait till morning,” I said.


My friends didn’t think it was a good idea, but they were cold and wet, so they agreed. We walked up the old wooden steps to the front door. The door creaked open and we went inside, sat down, and started to eat a chocolate bar, when we finished the candy so we anted to sleep we sleep on the floor then we feel a strange wind then we saw a ghost looking at us he said get out of the house now or else so we were very scared then we hurry get out of the house we run really fast we got lost in the wood we grabbed a stick then we feel like something is coming this way then we hidden behind a tree there was tree wolfs run really fast so we walk and walk deeper and deeper in the wood and we were very tired so we sleep then at the morning we were on the street and a lot of people staring at us, so we stand up and ran to our home we ell our parents about this but they didn't believe us then when we sleep we always having this Dream.

Pour: To rain a lot
Wander: Walk slowly
Shortcut: The fast way
Abandoned: The house that left for a long time a go.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Phei Eur, how are you?

    Your writing is interesting but try and remember to use the past tense.

    See here *then we feel like something is coming this way then we hidden behind*

    Better would be *then we felt like something was coming this way and so we hid behind...*

    Good job!

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